Here dreams lie forgotten.
Inner most yearnings pushed aside.
Lie here until awakened.
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Is it a haiku? I couldn't offer you any crit on it. I'm not much of a haiku person and because it's all so short and theres all sorts of hidden meaning I wouldn't be able to suggest anything so...
I like it, nice word choice, interesting subject, ends well. About all I can say.