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a personal Dr. Phil.

by EsmerayaRose


I’m standing in the middle of a room

Full of echoes, full of chaos,

Walls closing in, my heart racing,

Maybe I should get a personal Dr. Phil.


Someone to sift through the ashes

Of this fire burning in me,

This relentless rage,

This ache for clarity,

A scream lodged in my throat,

Waiting for the right moment to break free.


My family thinks I’m fine,

But they don’t see the way I crumble,

A porcelain doll with cracks,

Each one a story of disappointment.

Schoolwork piling high, textbooks stacked like tombstones,

Teachers with eyes like daggers,

Judging my worth by grades not heartbeats.


Politics swirling in the air,

A toxic fog I can’t escape,

Promises made, promises broken,

Who stands for us when the world feels so heavy?

I’m drowning in expectation,

A tidal wave of “be better,” “do more,”

But inside, I’m just a girl


Wrestling with shadows,

Chained to a past that feels

Like a noose tightening around my chest.

Voices whispering, "You’re not enough,"


Like a relentless chorus,

They cut deeper than any knife.

And here I am,

On the precipice of rage,

Fury swelling like a storm,

Ready to explode,

Fists clenched, heart racing,


Why can’t they see me?

Why can’t they hear the sirens

Wailing in my mind?

Maybe I should get a personal Dr. Phil


To help me navigate this storm,

To help me find the words


That twist and turn in my gut,

To scream back at the world,


To finally say, “I am here. I am real.”

But what if I don’t want help?

What if I just want to burn it all down,

To set fire to the expectations,

To watch the ashes settle,


And rise from the flames,

Unapologetic, unyielding,

A phoenix, fierce and free.

Maybe I should get a personal Dr. Phil,


Or maybe I just need to find my own voice,

To shout my truth into the void,

To let this fire burn bright,

To let it consume the silence,

To break free from the chains,

And finally, finally be.


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Wed Dec 04, 2024 3:24 pm
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ILikeTrains666 wrote a review...



I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Hi! Im gonna be reviewing your masterpeace

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know:
After reading this I gotta admit, I really relate to this and I feel this all the way. I can tell you put a lot of time into this.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
Well, see the thing is you can't perfect something that is already perfect. I don't see any room for improvement, really.


Chocolate Bar - I really loved this poem. It was easy and enjoyable to read. My favorite part would probably have to be

"To finally say, “I am here. I am real.”

But what if I don’t want help?

What if I just want to burn it all down,

To set fire to the expectations,

To watch the ashes settle,"

Closing Graham Cracker - Well that's all i have to say, i hope you have a good day/night :)




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Tue Nov 19, 2024 2:16 pm
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this is going to be my first review, so it's probably going to be very bad (and possibly cause unnecessary stress to you) but let's try


So first of all I absolutely love the topics and the idea since I can relate to this so lemme point out my favorite line

"A porcelain doll with cracks,

Each one a story of disappointment.

Schoolwork piling high, textbooks stacked like tombstones,

Teachers with eyes like daggers,

Judging my worth by grades not heartbeats"

the imagery is very vivid. I like the idea of the cracks being used to show the "disappointment" because I can almost imagine how it feels in my head. One thing that could be improved is that maybe the last line should have a comma in between "grades" and "heartbeats" even if it is a stylistic choice since the prior lines all do have commas in the correct places.


" just want to burn it all down,

To set fire to the expectations,

To watch the ashes settle"

This is.... very... visceral. I'm not sure if it's what you're going for but I can feel the sheer rage that comes with fire. I, too would love to do this.



Overall great job. Just one thing is that I'm not quite sure how the title ties to the topic because in general this poem is more about finding yourself then anything else.

- VWT





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