Life goes on the same
Life goes on...
Each day and every night
Life goes on...
To those in utter penury
And to those in obvious fame
Oh yes! Life goes on just the same
All roam in crowded streets
All watch ahead and have plenty meets
Some take the laborious road
Some forever are lost in a joyous mode
But once in a while
Somethings grip our heart
Pull it down and give us the blues
We fight, we struggle, to resist, to avoid
And to emerge out ...to rise above
These very disturbing hues...
Time’s like these
A babe’s innocent eyes
And it’s guileless smile
Is enough to lift one’s soul
Enough to remake it
Put it back together...
Together as a whole...
One look at the infinite sky
Will remind one of the Almighty high
And the burdened spirit thus be set free
All the knowledge and all the wisdom gained is but to see
Life’s quest to find this lost key
And thus as the sun sets behind
the canopy of mighty trees
As dusk takes over the day
Each shall sleep, each shall rest
The poor in the wretchedness
The rich in their gilded beds
The unknown in the dark
A few safe in their lurk
But each shall dream
Some of wicked pleasure,
Some of vileless joys
Because there’s always a tomorrow
To look forward to...
Because everyone has a future...
A future...that is their own...
That is theirs alone...
Oh! Life goes on the same
The enlightened shall see the truth;
The truth being their salvation
The blinded many shall be lost in their lives
Netted and caught
In a vortex of nothing and naught
But, Oh yes! Life goes on...
Life goes on the same...
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I applaud you for writing on such a 'open' topic such as life. You had a very clear vision for the poem and it showed in the length and how you made use of technique. I absolutely loved the dichotomy within the realm of the poem, but as well as within and between stanzas. The closing stanza is my favourite:
"Oh! Life goes on the same
The enlightened shall see the truth;
The truth being their salvation
The blinded many shall be lost in their lives
Netted and caught
In a vortex of nothing and naught
But, Oh yes! Life goes on...
Life goes on the same..."
I am not entirely sure, but it also feel that there is some religious aspect within the poem which you just subtly (very nicely done btw) brought into the poem, which is really cool.
I loved the piece!
I really admire the plain truth in this poem. And the way you prolonged your poem to take your meaning further, in the sense that life goes on.
I also noticed that your poem can be taken more than one way. Like how it could seem to be talking about moving on, or being stuck in an endless routine. Your obviously talking about both, so I'm thinking that you're trying to portray the fact that we can move on, but most of us don't, and we get caught in routine and we take things for granted and we slowly spiral down, down, down, down... Down, and down and Dow- okay, you get the picture.
So, um, anyway, I didn't see anything wrong with this except for its mild repetitiveness. And I hope to read more of your work.
My rating:4.99*s
Keep it up!
w&w