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Hi, EmoChikXoX. This is Pinkie here for review. You told me to do this for you so I will try my best on it.

I like the story as everyone said on here. It is very interesting and exciting to read about. It is about hell vs heaven action, and I love it! I love how the plot is like the bad vs good part. It lured me into the prologue and wanted to read the next chapter. It is very good and looks like a good story. I like the ideas that you gave on this prologue.

However, you got some errors on here. Like me, you had switched the tenses on some sentences. Hey, yours were better than mines so don't worry about it.

I think this novel is very successful and great to read. I love to more from it and give you a big hug! Don't say you're not a good author. You are great writer and you gave the best ideas that I had ever seen/read. I gave some great ideas that my mind gave me as it shows it like a movie, but I can't write it down good. However, I did my best on it like you did. Keep on doing it because you are amazing writer.

Amazing Job and Keep writing!

Your reviewer, Pinkiegirl13

P.S: I hope this is very much appreciated.

I like the way you are going with this story so keep at it. Just some spell checks that's all but all-in-all it's pretty good in my eyes. Keep going with it

Hi there! As a reader the overall feel was well developed. That bitter, angry, and vengeful tone is used pretty consistently and it effectively expresses that type of rebellious attitude of the devil. You definitely pulled it off.

However, I was distracted from all that was going on because of the constant change in tense. Almost every other sentence switched tenses and I got lost. Has this already happened? Is it happening now? Will it happen? Is part of it happening now but the other part already happened? The good thing about this is that you can fix it really easily. Pick a perspective of timing and go with it for the rest of the story. (Unless the prologue is meant to have a different tense than the rest. Just make sure you keep things consistent within this section).

Your idea is really great because it is all about (so far anyway) the epic battle between good and evil which has been raging throughout all time. And it's amazing how you were able to make that unseen battle real to us.

Keep it up! Don't be afraid to go through with the rest. But if it ends up giving you more trouble than enjoyment as you write it, feel free to put it on the back burner. Don't feel pressured. Just stay positive and see where this story goes for you.

I really enjoyed this piece. It had great imagery and a gripping intro that only continued to get better throughout the story. Like Asteria said, don't doubt yourself. You can only get better from here.

You've hooked me.

The idea, while it's one that has been told before and is a common concept, looks like it could go in so many different directions that I find myself wanting to know more. That opening paragraph alone was enough to hook my interest, and then it only continued to pull me in further when you brought Lucifer in. As you spoke of his surveyed the land that was once God's creation and how it now resembled yet another hell, one for him to inhabit and take over...

I truly want to see more and I hope that the reception from others is just as positive as mine. If you continue with it, you can count on me to follow each and every installment.

P.S- Don't doubt yourself and call yourself a "not very good author". Never undermine your abilities; After all, we're all our own worst critics. Let your work speak for itself.