Chapter 1
'It was great!' Brianna gushes to my mother. 'The Jefferson's are just so friendly and nice. They let Anne and I go out to the movies.'
I feel nauseated. Somehow Brianna gets all the luck. She has all the nice friends, has a really sweet, good-looking boyfriend and seems to have fun 24/7. She has long brown hair that comes to her waist golden eyes, tan skin and perfect figure. She has the best clothes. Which is opposite of me, I have dirty blond hair, grey eyes, and well, I think I'm chubby. I mean I'm not that fat but I definitely am fatter that Brianna.
The jealousy I get is overwhelming. When we were young we used to fight but we always made up. But now, we ignore each other. We hardly talk to each other, which is worse that fighting if you ask me.
Whenever she would give me that cold look, I felt hate almost ooze from her. It hurts like hell.
Sometimes, when I wanted to feel loved, I would cry- no, sob, ask myself why she hated me.
My parents always said that when we are in our twenties. I don't believe them. They say she's just being selfish. That, that will be just a phase in her life. Well this stage has lasted for years.
I don't think I will. Because she is not only my sister, she's my worst enemy.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
Anyway let's get right to it,
OKay, well this is starting off on what appears to be a person doing some very unhealthy comparisons between themselves and another friend or relative of their here...you can very clearly see that they've definitely lost a lot of self worth there....and appear to be a bit biter and cold as a result of it, not to mention there looks to be some hatred spring out too...so this is not headed in a very wholesome direction here.
Hmm, that feeling seems to be oddly mutual too, so that's a very interesting detail, I wonder what makes Brianna hate her so much, I mean it could be this person being that jealous and the whole fighting thing, but silent cold looks are usually very dangerous and this person is very justified in hating those far worse than simple fighting.
AHh, well so it is a relative, I did suspect that considering how the descriptions were happening earlier...and well sister means someone that should be particularly close but well, when there's a hatred of this sort between family, it is the genuinely the worst incarnation of hatred...and well this looks off to a very interesting start with that declaration towards the end. Certainly a pretty decent first chapter you've got right here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry