The Man Unmoving.

by Emanuelle

Published April 5, 2014

E - Everyone

In Dreamscapes

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He does not do anything.

He does not move.

He does not speak.

He does not blink.

He does not breathe.

He does not do anything but stand there, and look.

I first saw him when I was a first-grader, I think. Yes, early as a first-grader. Blurred as it was, the memory of that particular encounter stayed with me. I shared a room and a large bed with my brother, in a large three-bedroom condo in Kuala Lumpur. If I recall correctly, the first time I encountered this particular character was on a Tuesday night.

Mother had switched the light off and half-shut the door. For the first few hours after that, nothing was out of the ordinary. Then, half-asleep, I felt an ineffable urge to turn my eyes to the corner behind the door.

At first all I saw was the familiar shadow of the door, obscuring the corner, but soon I came to realize that something else was there.

He stood in the corner.

His form was covered completely with a dark cloak, and even a majority of his face was obscured by the hood that lay over his head. However, from what I could see (and piece together from all our other encounters), he was gaunt, and tall, and a sickly hue of white. The heft of time and experience had painted lines of age upon his wraith-like face and, as he stood motionless in the corner, shadows seemed to dance around him. His frail appearance was somehow his most solid aspect--his almost unrealistic presence was somehow his most grounding feature. I stayed silent and looked into the sunken pits of his eyes, cloaked also by the shadow of the hood.

I did not scream. I did not cry. In fact, when I think of it, I rather emulated his motionlessness. Of course I, being a first-grader at the time, did not think of the possibility that he might have been a burglar. Then again, what kind of burglar would stay still as a rock? I was not scared--intrigued, yes; disconcerted, a bit; discombobulated, quite; but never scared.

I looked back at him, for I was certain he was looking at me. The corners of his lips were turned down in something akin to a frown, but sorrow was not a dominant stroke in his countenance. Rather, it was fatigue that seemed to be induced by knowledge--as if whatever he knew became a weight that drained him of fervor, as if whatever he knew was a chisel, and time had used it to carve away the youth he must have once had--youth that was unlikely to have ever reigned his face, if I were to speak. However, nothing else came to my mind as I drifted off to sleep under the unrelenting solidity of his gaze.

That first encounter was also the last one in a span of many years. His presence evaded my mind and memory almost completely, leaving only a stealthy, washed-out print of warped familiarity that resided peacefully under the veil of worldly memory. Indeed, the memory of him was worldly only in the sense that I did not wake up from the "dream", thus leading me to conclude that it is, in fact, substantial; otherwise he seemed quite a divine being. But I thought naught of him any more, until a year ago. By that time I have already begun to regularly encounter a vast spectrum of characters--my grotesques, I call them.

Nowadays I see him regularly. Even though he is one of the most docile of my grotesques, he is also one of the strongest. He does not come to me. Rather, he appears--as if he had been standing in that spot for a length on a different plane, and the veil that separates his plane and mine simply fades away, allowing us each other's presences. To this, I think that the veil is consciousness, for therein there is worldly reasoning. Worldly reasoning would suggest that it is impossible, and therefore disregard him. However, when I teeter on the edge of sleep (and often become entrapped in sleep paralysis), this stubborn logic hibernates, and the impossible becomes the improbable.

It is rather unfathomable, however, that he sometimes appears even in my almost complete consciousness. While I am alone and empty-headed, of course. Then again a blank paper is always inviting to one with a pen, is it not?

I cannot say I am on friendly terms with him. I can hardly say that I am on any terms with him, seeing as all he does is... nothing. However, there is no way for me to declare that I do not like him. Of course, his presence can be a little disconcerting at times. But it is no more than slight discomfort, and he does not bring me any more disadvantage.

In the pandemonium of my morbidly iridescent Dreamscape, he is the only one that is consistently still. While he stands there and does nothing but exist, I begin to feel that he is a manifestation of something bigger, something that I do not have the power to change. Something that nobody has the power to change. He is a manifestation of darkness and death and energy and time and eternity and nothingness, of everything unchangeable and indestructible. He is Absolution.

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danickname Review
danickname wrote a review Review · Apr 27, 2014

As another fellow who used to suffer from these kinds of hallucinations, I can sympathize with you. Trying to tell your mom that a girl hanged herself in front of you is not an easy task. Heh, but enough joshing. On to the review!
I really liked how you wrote this story. The words sounds natural and doesn't sound forced like most POV stories. I also can't explain what, but your prose has a certain "draw" to it. The way the words are arranged just reel you into the story. And at the end of it, you feel legitimately horrified. You feel scared. You start checking the dark corners of your room for anything suspicious. Anything at all. And it manages to do this by relying completely on its tone and atmosphere. It doesn't come packaged with paragraphs describing the mauling of an infant by a demonic bear. No, it uses its clever, tricky words to keep you on the edge of your seat, holding your rear end in fear.
All in all, it's a chilling, little tale that has the potential to give you nightmares for a week.

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StupidSoup
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StupidSoup wrote a review Review · Apr 6, 2014

Dude, I;m pretty sure the story I was thinking of as I went to get more points by reviewing could probably be entered in this garden of grotesque things you're doing. Anyway, onto the-wait...who's that in the corner? (lol)

First off, compliments! The first thing I noticed about you're story was that it was part of a series that you are in the progress of making. Secondly, I like how you started you're story, this introduction really bought me into the story. Very nice hook. Lastly, I think you did a great job with you're vocabulary and you're description.

Onto criticisms! I do not like some of the words you used, for example, the word discombobulated. I know what it means but it makes the story feel childish, it messes with the tone you are trying to create. And...

Thats it! wow, not a lot of criticisms eh? That's because Either I am not intelligent enough to see any or there just aren't any. Anyway, good job! I am totally liking this.

Thank you!
yeah, I felt something was off... I see it now.
Cheers.
(love your ava, btw)

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Em101cats
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Em101cats wrote a review Review · Apr 5, 2014

I love this so much! I love the choice of long words that some readers may not recognize. The usage of these long words instantly makes you appear as a professional. The reader must think hard about what this TRULY means, and that is something that is rare.


I love the way you wrote this: not too long, but not short either. And the way you describe the things you need to is amazing. I was thinking as first, 'I may not like this.' But after I read it, I realized it's not something I read often, but I definitely enjoyed it.

Great work! I saw no errors!

Thank you! :D



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