Published October 13, 2010
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You stand me up
All the time
My heart is hurting all the time
You hurt me all the time
I cry all the time
You don’t care
But I do
You don’t see
You don’t hurt
But I do
All the time
You are whole
You haven’t shattered
I’m not whole
I have shattered
You don’t cry
You don’t wait
You run right past me and don’t even stop to wave good-bye
I try to catch you but I run out of steam
The steam you get from love
The steam only true love can give
I had a lot from you once
But I guess you stopped giving it to me along time ago
So I guess that means I should too.
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Coolio! I think 'along' is supposed to be 'a long' but other than that, it looks great! I enjoyed reading this. Good job.
That's better. Now it's perfect! You could win an award for this! I like the feeling of it too.
very good! what was your inspiration to write a meaningful poem such as this?
You run right past me ad don’t even stop to wave good-bye
And, elmo, not ad