Published June 29, 2008
Duet from my Musical.
[Chorus]
What is love and what’s it for?
I’m losing faith, can’t take no more.
Is it…hearing music in the night,
or underneath a ray of light?
I’m losing faith, I’m giving up,
got heaps of time, so little luck
And this one question keeps me company
so what the hell’s love got to do with me?
Love….
It’s not patient it’s not kind,
It screws you up, messes with your mind,
love isn’t in the past, love is today!
It’s dark and gusty, in a way…
Like punching your fist through glass,
hell, I bet love could kick your ass!
Hey!
Chorus
Forget music, forget light,
love is looking for a fight.
So stick them up,
It may be new, it may be old,
But It’ll knock you out cold!
Chorus
Love survives,
Hear that beat?
Love’s alive!
What’s it for?
You’re looking,
but you need to see more.
Even when it has to cheat
Love remains true.
Because love is me,
But most of all,
Love is you!
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I really like it. There is something about it that i like but I dont know what it is....
Another heartbreak song........who would have guessed?
and don't say I'm patronizing. There's a difference between cruelty and truth.
want to know what love is......I know.
Love is not what you're thinking of. Infatuation leads to a broken heart. Love never does. Love only comes in and grows when you can understand something that I don't even understand yet.
But I know now that Love, The Real kind of Love, is not something that will leave me high and dry.
[Chorus]
What is love and what’s it for?
I’m losing faith, can’t take no more.
Is it…hearing music in the night, The ... really threw me off. I'd get rid of them.
or underneath a ray of light?
I’m losing faith, I’m giving up,
got heaps of time, so little luck These two lines are really good.
And this one question keeps me company
so what the hell’s love got to do with me? These two lines are longer than the rest, and it makes it hard to sing. I'd shorten them, because the beat I got with the rest was really good, but it didn't work here.
Love….
It’s not patient it’s not kind,
It screws you up, messes with your mind,
love isn’t in the past, love is today!
It’s dark and gusty, in a way… Hmm... This doesn't really go. It's a bit cheesy. I'd replace it with something else.
Like punching your fist through glass,
hell, I bet love could kick your ass!
Hey!
Chorus I hate it when people do this, it's not hard to just copy the chorus in.
Forget music, forget light,
love is looking for a fight.
So stick them up, This threw me way off. I had a good tune going, but this is by itself and didn't work for me. I would get rid of it.
It may be new, it may be old,
But It’ll knock you out cold!
Chorus
Love survives,
Hear that beat?
Love’s alive!
What’s it for?
You’re looking,
but you need to see more.
Even when it has to cheat
Love remains true.
Because love is me,
But most of all,
Love is you!
I can tell that you're writing with a tune in mind, which is very good. Do you sing it as you write? You can pick up on a lot of mistakes if you sing as you write/after you finish.
Overall, and very good job!