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Young Writers Society



Because I love you guys?

by Eimear


**Okay, so I know it's not great poetry, in fact it's pretty bad, but I had this random bout of patriotism the other night when I read something about YWS failing. I think I mis-read it, but it got me thinking about how much I love this place and everyone in it. So, I hope you can endure, if not enjoy. **




Everyday, it’s a getting better,
If your world’s too cold, you know that we’re your sweater,
You want to feel loved? Then we’ll write you a letter,
with a heart and a kiss to seal,
don’t need human contact to make it real.
I’ll keep turning through my restless mind
If y’all on this sanctuary keep me intertwined
In a snug and a boost of the good stuff.
What better time to stick together, than when it gets rough?

What d’you all say?
Let’s rock the YWS casaba, today!
Only intended in a metaphorical way,
but then, similes, irony and whatnot,
It be my life, you guys are all I’ve got-
to dot the line and work the magic with your pen
to bed the floor with poems and lyrics in our den
a cup of tea and YWS does wonders to one’s Zen.

We’re never fussing, we don’t contemplate hating,
to the literary world we keep on impregnating,
stories and novellas, a masterpiece of words, a blitz!
Tell me, my old bean- what could be better than this?
An awesome community, a merry band of thieves,
stealing glory from old fogies with tricks up our sleeves.
Learning, growing, thriving for more
most of all loving
Isn’t that what YWS is for?


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Mon Mar 16, 2009 3:10 am
Musicaloo7311 wrote a review...



Hi! I liked this poem. It flowed really well and showed YWS a little love! That's what it needs. :wink:

No nit-picks on grammar, spelling, etc. Odd for me not to do so.

Wonderful. I've ended up giving a review that's about as useless as "OMG! I LOVEEEDD your poem!!!!!!!!!!" *sigh* Sorry about that.

Anyway, enough moping on my part! Great poem. Gold star for Ms. Eimear!

Love,
Music. :)




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Mon Mar 16, 2009 1:13 am
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Oh my gosh :o

I loved it! It was great! It flowed tremendously well, and it rhymed! [s]Poems here lost their rhyming[/s] No poems here anymore do not rhyme much anymore. :( It's sad, rhyming helps flow! It's smart to rhyme. :P Not many grammar or spelling errors! It was inspirational too! Bravo!

-Colt




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Sun Mar 15, 2009 10:10 pm
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I loved how it flowed. Not very sing song, but it was very personal and down to earth. If you're British, I have to say, it's very British :D. Otherwise, I didn't just say that, right, right!?!?!

Learning, growing, thriving for more

most of all loving


Just noticed this, comma needed, but overall, I really liked it. We here be tight knit, a bit like, you know, like tight knit things, only most of us don't live anywhere near each other :D.





You are beautiful because you let yourself feel, and that is a brave thing indeed.
— Shinji Moon