Hello! I really enjoyed reading your poem a lot. I love the dialogue! There are a few small mistakes that should be fixed.
As I am reading the poem I look over each time someone speaks. Typically there would be quotation marks (") but I see no quotations.
Another error is that there should be a period after each sentence. I see periods but where there should be a period, there is no period.
you knew that she couldn't finish
your sentences anymore,
This part confuses me when you say 'your sentences anymore,' I don't know If that was a typo or if you meant to say this or there is something I am just not getting but It just confuses me and possibly other readers.
Overall, I loved the poem and it has so much potential. I hope you keep up the good work and KEEP WRITING!
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