Wesh! Professor Jade here to review your poem. The title reminded me of Dora the Explorer for some reason, but I thought I'd check it out.
Let's just get to it....
Exploring
I run to the sea,
And I seek a tree
Above me,
The flow is good and the rhyme scheme is consistent. Trees and seas have nothing in common so maybe keep to one theme per stanza.
I see,
Some bees,
Flying over leaves
I then climb this tree,
You need less commas and more periods. It makes it feel choppy instead of flowing.
And scrape my knee,
The bark is rough,
And Tough.
I cry in pain
I keep on crying
and saying
I should never have done that,
Now Exploring
Is boring.
OVERALL: This is a fun and lighthearted poem. I enjoy your style and I can't wait to see more by you. Until then, I hope this helped.
-Professor JadeLotus-
Points: 1578
Reviews: 232
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