Good concept; I like it. However you seem to have some controversial issues with grammar. You have good punctuation and capitalization and then just the opposite... sometimes in the same exact sentence. What?
How will I cope?
But now that I'm here,
So I don't have to cope,
All I ask for is little,
Inside I'm already dead.
As I plead in despair.
Even if you were writing this in a hurry, that is no excuse. It only takes a couple minutes to read over and edit tiny things like that.
Some spelling errors and typos I spy as well.
The nights now are lonely,
With trying to be brave.
I'm torn apart,
As I said before, I like the concept, you caught your theme very well. You also kept rhythm and flow throughout the entire poem. Nice work!
Best Regards,
Doctor
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