Dear Members of this forum,
I thought some of you may be interested in reading an essay I wrote for a contest, and is currently entered. This is totally my work, and not changed from the original essay. And also, about it getting kind of squished at the end, it had to be 250 words or less so I had to cram my thoughts a little.
Also, for those anti-Hunters, this story has nothing about shooting the deer, so relax! Please enjoy this story.
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-Dreami
Even when I was little, I looked forward to being able to hunt with my brothers and my dad. I always admired the deer upon the wall, and the stories they would tell me. On the day of their return from up north, I would constantly peer out the window, watching for them, ready to run out and ask my dad what had happened. He smiled at me, and started to tell me wonderful stories of albino deer, black squirrels, newborn fawns, or any other unusual animal he had seen.
These stories soon became more interesting than the little bit of candy he gave me from a candy store near the land. Now, I am finally able to hunt, and I realize from my family why hunting is so wonderful.
I always wanted the experience of being able to go out in nature and watch all the animals scurry around. I love looking at pictures of young, long-legged fawns next to the slim does. I never know what to expect, and it gets more exciting as a large buck makes his way towards the stand. It is impossible to know whether the animal that’s head peaks out of the brush will be a muscular buck or a small doe. And most of all, I can spend time with my dad and brothers. They sometimes tease, but they always help me.
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I have introduced a lot of people to hunting. The reality of it compared to the way it is portrayed in the media is very different. In the media, unless it is specifically a “hunting show” on something like the Outdoor Channel, it’s going to have a really bad (and ignorant) anti-hunting bias. And even if it is a pro-hunting show, it’s going to be just a few minutes of highlights of what might be several days of hunting.
The reality of hunting is this; less than 1% of your time is spent shooting. You spend all of your time searching for the game. (That’s why it’s called “hunting” and not “shooting”)
Depending on the type of hunting this is either walking quietly, carefully through the woods or fields focusing all your attention on scanning with your eyes and listening with your ears for the sound of your game. Or you are sitting as still and quiet as possible in a ground blind or a tree, waiting for the game to come to you. You may do this for hours. You may do this for days. You may never see a single animal of the type you are hunting. (We call this “getting skunked”). You may go all season and never see anything.
Hunting is a game of patience. The more you hunt, the more you study and learn about your quarry, the more you are likely to know how to identify good hunting areas and know how to hunt them. However even the best hunters get skunked. And occasionally green newbs get lucky.
When you do see the game your are hunting, only a fraction of the time will it be close enough or still enough that you have time for a shot. There may be a tree in the way. They may see you before you see them and all you see is the south end of a north bound deer as it disappears into a thicket.
And then finally, when you do have a good shot, you may only have a brief time to take the shot (this is especially true of small game hunting like rabbits or grouse). You take your shot as quickly as you can (a) confirm your target, (b) confirm nobody / dog / building / car is in that direction, and (c) aim. Hopefully you hit it.
And then it’s down and dead. So the “killing” part of hunting is a small, small part. Hunting is all about the intellectual challenge of pitting your knowledge and skill against the instinct and senses of the wild game. If a person was a real sadist that enjoyed killing as portrayed in the movies, they would be sorely disappointed by hunting. You’d be a lot better off going to a pet store and buying a dozen hamsters and taking them home.
I have never seen extravagant celebrations after someone killed an animal. Excitement for sure, but the most common behavior is satisfaction and almost a sort of relief, because of the tension with big game and having spent days or weeks hunting and weeks before that of preparation. As a deer hunting you prepare all year for that one buck you may or may not get, and the killing part is over in a few seconds.
So what I’ve found introducing people to hunting is that a lot of them think it’s boring and once they realize the effort you need to put in, and how little time is spent shooting they have an entirely different picture.
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Honestly, your description were rather short and it is kinda turned me off to read the whole piece. I've had a hard time to understand your last sentence, because I think the lines doesn't conclude the description and the purpose of this piece. And personally, I'm an Anti-hunting and there's a lot of cases of illegal hunting and selling the rare, exotic animals in my country (Indonesia), also illegal logging. I would like to hear more of your story, in the beginning you've became a pro-hunting and your reason to preserve your family's tradition of hunting. You should have make your story longer and it was interesting or maybe you may want to work it out and develop it for a literary fiction.
Next, I think you did really good with the grammatical and spellings. I hope to see more of your works
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Aulyasela3597
The descriptions were rather short. You would start off with what seems like a good descriptions but you wouldn't go on with it. Your last sentence doesn't conclude the whole thing very well. You should lengthen this and work on it more.