Published January 28, 2012
When I’m with you
I never want to get away
I wish the sky would always stay blue
Prolonging this blissful day
Having you here right now
Next to me like this
As we watch the sun take a bow
As our lips meet for The Kiss
When we’re facing the last rays of sunshine
And your laugh is music to my ears
And your eyes pierce through mine
Making me forget all my fears
When I lay in your arm
At the summit of the world
As you keep me warm
As in you I lay curled
When its just both of us-
The only breathing souls
As the sun, without so much as a fuss
Drowns in the water’s burning coals
I look up in your eyes
And I feel a thug in my heart
Here on the hill top that lies
Between us and the world; drawing us apart
I wish I had the power
To control that heartless man
Who somehow makes forever
Seem a withered can
‘Cause you see, my only yen
Is for right now to be forever
And that no matter where or when
We shall always be together.
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I love this poem. It has a really nice feel to it, and captures the beauty of nature. It also has connotations of sex, or is it just me? It has a very romantic ora about it, which is expressed awesomely in my opinion.