I finished reading your poem and thought I would take the time to write a small review on it. First of all, just to say that I really liked the poem and as I can see it, its very well written. Using rhyme in your poem was a very effective technique as it made the poem more enjoyable to read. What the poem is about is a very serious topic and thus makes the poem thought provoking and it inspires us to change that reality mentioned in the poem which if we continue like that, well eventually reach. I also thought the rhythm of the poem reflected the world spinning on its axis, of history repeating itself. Then the images used at the start of the poem are very beautiful. I don't think you would need to change it as your poem is perfect as it is now, as it conveys your own style and voice in poetry.
Well done!!
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