Hi. This is kman134. I'm here to review your work.
Caliginous meaning dark and misty. It is the fear of the unknown and the darkness that creates such a feeling. The way you describe the dread in your lines was nicely done and gives off the crushing sense of doom and hopelessness. A world absent of light as it is taken away in such a nightmarish reality.
"Light falls as the cloud of doubt surrounds my mind
and slowly it begins to eat away that feeling known
Reality becomes numb and consciousness withers away
The loss of oneself one must withhold."
This is my favorite line. It displays the narrator failing sense of sanity as he/she is slowly consumed by his own inner demons. This defeatism is common within certain works of weird fiction like H.P. Lovecraft and Itou Junji where the protagonists are faced with something so horrific that they are incapable of comprehending what is before them and slowly become consumed by the madness that surround them.
This is a really good work. I hope you write more of this stuff.
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