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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well..this was quite a first chapter, it started out seeming quite innocent and then well, this one took a very rapid turn there...and that certainly made things very intriguing here. Well more details on all that down below!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
"Hey.... Mommy?" I asked Mommy as I tucked her apron. Mommy stopped her continuous movement of cutting fresh turnips with a pointy knife, tilted her head and said,"Yes, pumpkin love?"
Okay...that was a very wholesome start there, looks like its just a young child asking a question from her mother while they're cooking and well, for a first chapter, that's one of the most innocent scenes that I have personally witnessed. Well...starting things off with a smile here.
Hesitating, I stared down at the taintless floor and took a deep breath before asking her again,
"Is it normal to have a watch that tells you numbers apart from one to twelve?" Mommy plastered her usual sweet smile on her face and answered,
Hmm...taintless floor their sounds a little weird to me...I don't know if its wrong in some way or if it just sounds weird, but it just doesn't seem like the way that you'd describe a floor in a situation like that...that aside though...well it looks just like another random innocent question from a child here...seems pretty normal so far here.
"Are you questioning me nonsensical questions aga-"
"You've got exactly seventy-seven hundred and forty-eight more hours to live, Mommy," I stuttered before leaving the kitchen. I heard the sound of the knife whack against the floor as Mommy's stare bore into my skull just before I headed to my bedroom on the second floor.
Well you can't fault the mother for reacting like that, although wow, that is a serious hazard to have a knife just drop to the floor there. At any rate, this is a serious bombshell that just appears completely out of nowhere in the middle of this very innocent seeming scene and well the way that she runs off there adds even more to how she got that information and why. That just seems like a very grave piece of news for a child to deliver quite as easily as this one did here....well...that certainly got my attention.
She probably had not believed a word I said; for because I was only seven that time. But on the other hand, her mind was filled with curiosity and wonders.
Just like how I got the watch.
And how she saw herself in the watch lying on the hospital bed, catching her very last breath before the cardiac sinus rhythm went bleeeeeeeeep.
Oh wow..well...that's a straight up death scene right there...and it looks like there's a bit of a flashback forward to a different time here. One on hand that is a bit of a sudden transition there from that scene in the past to a future self talking about it...but I think this one actually manages to work well enough here. Moving past that, well, that's some pretty heavy information there, realising that the child there is only seven for one...and then of course the fact this prediction is actually something that happens potentially. Certainly a very mysterious ending there to this first chapter...soo...I'd say this is a pretty well chosen ending here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, pretty solid first chapter here that you've got...I definitely would follow this story after seeing this as the first chapter. And well..that's about all I've gotta say here for now.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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