this is pretty awesome. has a very organic emotional flow, if that makes any sense. great work!
Sometimes I think I fell off the Ark,
Because I feel alone, a speck.
In the vast ocean
That covered the Earth.
I was pushed to the bottom,
The current tearing at my skin,
And I met a Man.
And that Man told me to defy gravity.
I resurfaced and floated to the sun.
And today I decided to come back to Earth.
this is pretty awesome. has a very organic emotional flow, if that makes any sense. great work!
This is really good, although the line "sometimes I think I fell off the Ark," is kind of strange. I'm sure it's referring to Noah...but I like it anyway. Keep posting new stuff...I like reading it. Also: instead of "And I met a Man" I think it would connect/flow better if it was "Then I met a man" (with a period after "skin" instead of a comma). Just some ideas which you might not agree with, but that's okay! Tootles.
I'm not sure what it was supposed to mean but I liked it and I have no clue why. That's just the way I roll, but anyway I liked it. Keep up the good work because you that was erally good and I'm babbling so I guess I'll stop now
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