Romance..MY FAVORITE!! Haha..I enjoyed the poem. I think by just making a little longer, it will really add to the feeling that you really love this person because your going on and on about all of their amazing qualities and your undying love for her.
Maybe change "stream oiur your beautiful" to "stream out of your beautiful."
And I think you could take out the and between beautiful and dangerous, may make that line flow a little better. "Hypnotizing" can be changed to "hypnotic." Nice poem...I wrote romance too so I'd really love a review from you.
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