Published February 28, 2011
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Hey!
I thought this was very cute! My favorite part was the ending...
I liked this because it seemed really deep, and it is also very true. When you love someone, your feelings feed off of their feelings.
When reading this poem I didn't find any errors, so nicely done. I also thought the flow was good. Great first post!
-Jessa
Welcome DarkVanilla,
I only have one thing to say really. I loved it, I was a good poem. Keep writing!
Nice, can't comment on it so much, but... found a mistake here:
It should be "achieving".
I thought that this line:
was pretty good, it makes the reader more involved in the poem.