Young Writers Society

What's that? On the Horisun? It's a... It's a... Review incoming!
Alright, so, this has a very interesting premise. It feels like a kids daydream, more than anything else, which I'm not sure if that's what you're going for. I also think the kid is adorable. But there are a few things I want to point out.
First of all, I don't think Wallys brother says a word this entire time, which I find strange.
Second, a lot of the i's are not capitalized. Which they should be.
Third, this might be up for debate, but I don't think you need three exclamation points.
Another thing, it might flow a bit better if you cut "So" out, but that's up to you.
Lastly, a few lines are a little repetitive, reread them, and you'll notice it. Just play with the word choice a bit, and that should help.
Other than that, I really liked this, it was fun, and silly, and I'll be sure to read the next chapter!

You have a really interesting premise, and I know this is just the start of your idea, but if you flesh this out it could be really something. One thing you need to worry about is format. Reading a wall of text with no paragraph breaks can be very confusing and will make it hard for you readers to follow along. Each new line of dialogue should start its own paragraph.

I really like the idea you have, though. A kid traveling to the future is awesome! I want to see his adventures. I also really like that it's a one-way trip. However, I think you should concentrate on that a little more. It seemed unrealistic that Wally's father would be so okay with him taking a one-way trip to the future. And think you should concentrate on the idea of Wally never being able to return, to never see his friends and family again.

Anyway, this was an interesting idea. I hope to see more soon. However, you shouldn't wait for approval to write something. if you have an idea just go for it. You don't need anyone's permission.

This is very intersted but im failing to find a point. If there is more to this story then I have not read it yet. From this alone I am confused and left dissatisfied at that ending. Its very interesting as I've said but has not ending or even a true cliff hanger its a dead stop.

Your style draws me in but you have some spelling mistakes in there. Overall Keep it up but add an ending (if there is more like i said im sorry i havent seen it)