That fast mouth,
I had one before.
The orange peeled hemisphere-
it closes you in
But I've known that before
If you watched the landscapes trickle away
would it ever be soon enough?
That fast mouth,
It wants you to hear it
at this moment
because tommorow means another
restless night,
But we've had those before.
That fast mouth,
The words written on your tongue
shown upside down.
You talk quickly.
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You used a lot of awkward repitition:
This is too short of a poem to use so much repitition. Also, the last line:
I've heard poems end like this before, but I don't really like it. It leaves the reader, me, with a sense of something incomplete and obvious - we understand the fast talking already (hence "fast mouth" is the title). I'd revise some of this.