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Yours Sweet Sounds

by Cloud_Stepping


Your sweet sounds get me by.
They're what makes me feel alive,
and for those blue eyes ill always try.
You shed a tear and my blood runs dry.

I can tell when your down, your sweet sounds give you away.
and when your trying to pretend that your not angry..
your sweet sounds they do betray.

I can tell when your trully happy for im at your oceans depth.
You tell me more than 2 hour movies,
with a subtle tone of comfort under your breath.
I only have my sweet words and i just write them on your wall,
but you somehow tell me in greater detail without moving your lips at all.

Im a radio out of tune, picking up a station no one hears.
you used to give me the happiest moments but now they are running into years.
i could write a million books about it,
because your language knows no bounds.
lets do a trade for life...my sweet words for your sweet sounds.
The End


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Mon Apr 02, 2007 10:06 pm
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That was really really good. Though the punctuation/capitilisation kind of distracted me [especially when some of it is correct grammar and some of it isn't] I liked it overall despite that.

Im a radio out of tune, picking up a station no one hears <--- this was my favourite line.




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Mon Apr 02, 2007 6:51 am



that was amazing.
real good.
and yeah it's okay the puntuation is something me most skip over. heh.




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Sun Apr 01, 2007 6:09 pm
Cloud_Stepping says...



Yeah i usually skip over puntuation and capatilizing letters....my bad




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Sun Apr 01, 2007 4:45 pm
Nyconz421 says...



Want me to be truly honest? This was really good. The only problem that I would have in it are some few errors that are really not that big of a deal. Just remember to always capatilize "i".





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