Published April 23, 2008
Prologue Part 2: The Boy With All the Theories
March 10, 1989, the anniversary of the discovery, a boy was born in Dewey Oklahoma. His name was Alexander. He went to a new home with his parents, John and Linda Montgomery. His infancy and childhood gave no sign or warning of what future was to be sprung upon him. He was sixteen when he took interest in Ecology, more specifically, the theory of Global Warming.
He never liked or agreed with what the best scientists in the world had to say about the subject. He always had his own theories, and as he became older he would revise or substitute his theories for newer more plausible ones. At first he believed the problem was in the carrying capacity of the Earths human population. He soon abandoned that theory all together. In 2009, Global Warming hit a climax. It broke off a thirty-two mile chunk of Antarctica. A category five hurricane, nicknamed Ron, completely laid waste to the east coast. The worst came a month later. The jet stream came to a crawl and brought widespread drought and flooding to random parts of the world. The North Atlantic Current shifted and began a backwards cycle causing already serious problems to escalate to never before seen levels. The apocalypse was on the doorstep and humanity’s days were numbered.
Alexander had several theories of what was causing this but no solutions. He needed to know where the truth of the starting point was and how to stop it. The solution would come from a most unlikely source. Most that survive until 2012 called this source true fate, destiny, or coincidence. Whatever it truly was, It was their only last hope.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
OKay this is interesting. Its not the sort of thing you run into too often here, and that is that we've got this prologue which does in fact have the sort of title that does instantly pull you in there, starting off on sort of a newspaper article/ history textbook vibe which is normally not the best idea but in this instance it seems to be working out okay, so let's see where this leads.
Alright, well this seems to sort of follow the more classic apocalypse movie template where we do have sort of crazy situations happening around a world slowly pulling itself apart through some sort of in this case man made apocalypse and we have one lone person who seemingly can somewhat predict it. Its a bit cliche, but I think you are doing a decent job of making things pretty interesting here.
Oooh well I suppose this particular trope kind of expired ten years ago, but this is still a pretty fun way of bringing about the end of the world here and it looks like you've put some good though into this and come up with something a bit more unique than most of the things out there and while its not completely unique this piece is intriguing enough to make you want to read on and find out more.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Church.
My comments from part 1 stands.
I also think you should combine the two parts; prologues are rarely a two-part affair, and they are short enough that combining them would leave the piece of a tolerable length.
--King
Me again to check out your work.
1) I like this better than the other half of the Prologue
2) This half is written better, and it sounds like you at least know what you're talking about
3) below are my suggestions, ect
Have fun
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Prologue Part 2: The Boy With All the Theories ------- decent title ------
March 10, 1989, the anniversary of the discovery, ------------- I think he should be younger. . . but that's just me ------------ a boy was born in Dewey Oklahoma. His name was Alexander. He went to a new home with his parents ------- what? Is that needed? "he went to a new home" that just sounds illy. . . ---------, John and Linda Montgomery. His infancy and childhood gave no sign or warning of what future was to be sprung upon him. He was sixteen when he took interest in Ecology, more specifically, the theory of Global Warming.
He never liked or agreed with what the best scientists in the world had to say about the subject. ----------- use his actual name sometimes, instead of always "he" ---------- He always had his own theories, and as he became older he would revise or substitute his theories for newer more plausible ones. At first he believed the problem was in the carrying capacity of the Earths human population. He soon abandoned that theory all together.
--------- new topic, new paragraph ---------- In 2009, Global Warming hit a climax. It broke off a thirty-two mile chunk of Antarctica. A category five hurricane, nicknamed Ron, completely laid waste to the east coast. -------- you could have the effects these events caused, in here - it'd be interesting to read about the devastation and everyone dying ---------- The worst came a month later. The jet stream came to a crawl -------- for those who don't know what the jet stream is, please explain ---------------- and brought widespread drought and flooding to random parts of the world. The North Atlantic Current shifted and began a backwards cycle causing already serious problems to escalate to never before seen levels. The apocalypse was on the doorstep and humanity’s days were numbered.
Alexander had several theories of what was causing this but no solutions. He needed to know where the truth of the starting point was and how to stop it. The solution would come from a most unlikely source. Most that survive until 2012 called this source true fate, destiny, or coincidence. Whatever it truly was, It was their only last hope. ------------ last 2 sentences sound a bit... silly -----------
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Love it.
*off to read chapter one*
Cheers, Jhai