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hey Chris!!

jay here drop a review

First off this poem was really sad to me and i really didn't wanna cry but i did actually a little and everyone has there own opinion on what they like or don't like but to me this poem made me sad when i read it and you wanna know my part in your work poem Is it worth it?

This pain

This horror

This sadness

Just for one feel of happiness? just keep putting the effort in to it


Second my compliment is you should of made a poem with your heart or just feel what you are feeling and just write what you feeling but i enjoy it


how you could of improve is make a poem that would have a type of vibe like a lyrical poem and think what you feel that is a type of vibe or listen to someone that has good music but find a word or something that would go with it


keep writing and yeah i hope you enjoy this lovely review and have a good day!!!

Hi! I'm here for a review.

First off, this poem hit hard. No, it didn't ruin my day... The ending made my day. That was really a twist since the rest of the poem seemed doubtful and depressed. The ending, in contrast, was very reassuring. I like that 'twist'

Second, I like the way you've written the whole thing from the perspective of a person who's probably suffering greatly due to love. The questions, the uncertainty... It all seems so perfect.

The last line, 'Yes, it is' sound like the speaker telling him/herself that it was all worth doing, or feeling. This whole poem feels like a string of thoughts in the speaker's mind, which I think is great.

I only have one suggestion. I think, in the end, instead of putting the '...', you could end it with a single full stop. That way, it would seem certain.

Overall, this was a great poem!

Keep Writing!!

In this beautiful poem, you ask the a timeless question that has plagued humanity for as long as human beings have existed: "Is it worth it?" To which I say an emphatic yes, endure any pain just to feel-especially if feeling that pain helps you write poems like this! I appreciate this glimpse of how you're feeling,-....
(But I feel the line "Just for a glimpse of how your hand feels to mine?" should be changed to something like, "Just for "the feel of your hand to mine?" as the word "glimpse" implies use of vision, and you are talking not about SEEING but FEELING...)
-feeling all the worst parts of being a human being, and using those terrible feeling to create something beautiful, which can maybe inspire others to turn their own pain in to something equally beautiful, which may in turn help you find the inspiration to write another beautiful poem like the one that helped them!
Such is the circular nature of not just humanity, but all of nature, which allows us to answer definitively that, yes, it absolutely IS worth "it", no matter what "it" is: it inspires all that is truly beautiful about humanity in the first place. Your poem is just one example.

Hi Chris!

Here for a quick review for your poem. The emotions conveyed in the poem feels like coming after a quiet introspection done by the narrator and he's trying to confront himself by asking these questions. One could easily resonate to most of these questions because I feel we all undergo through some hard times that makes us wonder, if it was really worth it. All the pain and struggle that we had to do whether it was justified. Well the answer will vary from person to person. Getting the desired results makes us forget all these hardships and we only enjoy the fruit of our hard work. But the issue arises when we fail, that's when we try to confront ourselves whether all of this was even worth it or not.

The first two stanzas dealt with the negativity we face in life. The third one feels a bit more personal because it looks like the narrator doubts about his very own existence (more like an existential crisis).
The last stanza feels a bit cliche like the previous reviewer pointed out. There are things mentioned in that stanza that are worth it, like loving someone, having a friend and someone who believes in you. But 'to see them leave you', doesn't fit right if you are justifying that these are actually worth it. But I do get the raw emotions behind this poem so I won't ask you to make changes because at the end it's all about expressing your own views and letting out our pain.

I could feel the emotions in this poem and I loved the simplicity. You must continue to express yourself more with your writings. Hope to see more from you All the best.

Great work!
Keep writing

(Also, if you want to make a line break, try using 'Shift+Enter' where you want to write something in the immediate next line and then use only 'Enter' when you want a one line break. This is what I do every time)

Woah!! A very deep poem. So let's sink in the depths together.

Hey there ! Anne here for a review!!

First of all, these are really deep thoughts, and I can't see either why thinking a lot is bad. I guess it isn't if you're not anxiously thinking but just generally thinking. I get these thoughts too- maybe not exactly in this shape- but still I could relate a lot to this poem.
Awe-inspiring thoughts on your behalf.

In the first two stanzas, I really liked the buildup of the words. The flow from smaller words like pain to the bigger words like loneliness, is really great.

Is it all worth it?

This life

This family

This story I live in...

Is it worth it?

To love someone

To see them leave you?

To have a friend

To have someone believing you aren't a weirdo?

Is it all worth it?

Yes, it is...

The message is deep and I am a fan of it. The ending if very well written. Tthis made my day a bit better. Reminds you that there is still value in continuing to keep going even when it seems worthless to do so.

I tried to use space between some stanza's but it doesn't work...Plz, let me know if you know how it works...Maybe it might be because I copied it from somewhere?

Is it worth it?

This pain

This horror

This sadness

Just for one feel of happiness?


Is it worth it?

This loneliness

This depression

This helplessness

Just for a glimpse of how your hand feels to mine?


Is it all worth it?

This life

This family

This story I live in...

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Is it worth it?

The ache

The empty heart

The hopelessness

Just to love someone?


Is it worth it?

To love someone

To see them leave you?

To have a friend

To just have someone believing you aren't a weirdo?

Is it all worth it?

Yes, it is...

Author's note

I wonder a lot and I don't think that's bad...But if you feel like I ruin your day writing this poem I'm really sorry. I'm not good at writing something that might not ruin someones' mood...

I hope you enjoyed reading this Plz, post comments, and suggestions below.

Have a nice day!