Young Writers Society

This is truly emotional. It's questioning without answers. The title fits alright, it describes emptiness. It's basically self- doubt and presenting fear to the everyday stereotype path of life. With comments below, they noticed the grammar errors which I do see. You should edit them, though if considering to published it widely in some magazine or whatever major literary format. The story is basically just thinking to herself, the main character here. The character is like questioning their future existence of her human condition. Analyzing herself and the future, and everything that is feared is the whole piece about as I do feel some connection, but since it's short it also cuts away the feeling. Not saying longer the better, actually it's the quality that brings to presentation but anyways its a short piece of work.

Overall, it's the questioning of emotions and life. No answers though. It's like as if one falls into a pit and cannot get up.
So good work, but I'd advise to check your grammar for future works.

Great job! I'm very impressed. When I read this I was curious as to what got you inspired to write it. Believe it or not you aren't the only on who has described this feeling. A lot of people are still struggling with it but express it in different ways. That or they try and ignore it like the woman in this story. I've seen it go both ways in the end it all depends on how that person decides to handle it. There are a few punctuation problems but nothing major. Except for the concept of this story there are two other things that I like the most. 1.) The comparisons that you used like with the drop of water after a rain. 2.) The flow of it. You can really tell you put a lot of thought into this, or something inspired you so much that it just came to you. The flow made the emotions stand out but also collide together without crashing. Again you did a good job. Keep up the good work.

Hey! I really like the story/idea of this. I feel like there are a lot of people who can relate to it on all levels. It really captures how one thought can lead to a downward spiral of "what if's" and worries.

The main problem I noticed was grammar and punctuation. You also had many capitalization errors as well, but that may have just been your computer or formatting. I would just take a little more time when proofreading your work to make sure you don't have too many commas and spelling errors. Spell check is always a good place to start, but don't always trust it. Its very easy for spell check to miss over a word that is wrong simply because it's technically right. Let me explain. If you mean to type the word "if" but accidentally type "it", (it seems to happen to me a lot), spell check won't find anything wrong with that because "it" is still a word, and is very commonly used. Spell check only catches major spelling errors, it often passes over silly keyboard errors like that. A few pairs of human eyes often do the trick of catching little mistakes like that.

Overall, I really like your writing style. I feel like you are very relatable and realistic with your work and I like that. Keep writing!!
Have a good day!!

God work, though the punctuations and spelling are aweful

Hey! I'm Maddie and I'll be reviewing your work.
First, I want to say that in order for me to even be able to review this, I had to copy/paste it into Scrivener and paragraph it correctly. Please, please, PLEASE paragraph your works. One new paragraph per new topic. (For example, when you went from what happiness is and then onto pulling the character back to reality.) Just a pointer.

Next, you have an almighty amount of spelling, and capitalization errors littered throughout this piece.
Spellcheck is not your friend. Don't trust it for the life of you. For example, you have the word "Wander" instead of "Wonder." Spellcheck saw nothing wrong with this. So keep an eye out for these things. Another example is "Eco" instead of "Echo." There's another one in here. "Finnish," like the nationality, and "Finish," like a finish line. Read over your work with a pair of human eyes. It'll help your work feel and look more professional.
On capitalization, only capitalize names and the beginning of sentences. When you write "What IS happiness," you should decapitalize the "is" and make the words in italics. That way, it keeps the soft, prose poem-ish air to it instead of the sound of an impulsive teenager.

On that note. Holy cow, your character, who obviously hasn't married or gotten together with anyone, sounds like an adult who has gone through so many bad things. Your character seems insane, going on spiels like BSoDs about every single topic they want. Typically people think about one or two things at a time, and only wonder what it could be like, especially teens. Your main character in particular acts like she's gone through so much in life, that she could only spend her days with a warm cup of tea in her hands, like some old grandma. [i][No./i]

Sorry if my review seemed harsh, but I wanted to improve your story, and sugar-coating it wasn't going to do anything.
Keep Writing!
Maddie out!

I know I am terrible at punctuation, but your story was just full of abused commas. You replaced a lot of spots that should be periods with commas, and in doing so your whole story is just nonstop run on sentences. You should only split a sentence with a comma once. Splitting it with a comma more than once creates run on sentences and confusion. You also failed to split that large paragraph into a proper one and instead mixed together a string of random ideas that get very confusing. You need to break up the paragraph properly because the abuse of commas created tons of confusion, that throwing in random comparisons and ideas just made a lot worse. Those two issues alone made this story a mess and extremely confusing, you should go back and fix those issues to avoid putting off your readers.

I honestly couldn't figure out a single thing you were trying to say with the story. Is it that you're depressed? You don't believe love is possible? Is it about being pessimistic? I couldn't understand the idea or the point behind this because it's to mixed up and confusing. It could be good i'm sure, but the way it's written right now isn't. It's not the worst I have seen on here, and no offense meant but it's below average.