We’ve heard them say there’s a time for changes.
But never in my life, so many in different ranges.
From 100 per day to 900 per day.
This disease wants our lives to pay.
First, toilet paper was out of stock.
People wait around the clock.
Watching the CBC live.
Wondering what to do to survive.
Parks’ closed down masks were mandatory.
And the disinfectant is a whole different story.
What year do I talk about? I’m sure you know plenty.
About the shocking year known as 2020.
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Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping in a quick review. I don't think we have officially met but I'm Moonlily. Now forgive me if this review is short but I hope I can make your day a bit better. I think I should stop my rambling and start the review properly. Let's get into it, shall we?
Overall I found this a fun little poem. It's a lot more fun than COVID was at the time, I think we are getting to the point where we can look back on it in a slightly lighter sense. I think this did a good job of pointing out the chaos of the whole year in a condensed way.
The things you chose to highlight are certainly memorable to those who lived through it. I also like that you keep the year till the end since most readers would be already thinking of it by the hints alone. plus who doesn't like a good title call back near the end?
Lastly, I feel like the rhyme scheme carries the tone and voice of this piece. It gives the whole thing an almost playful tone that kind of reminds me of stuff like The Night Before Christmas. Despite this, it doesn't ignore the very real fears that were rampant
Now normally I would move on to the feedback but I couldn't find anything past what Elliemae said. I don't want to beat a dead horse, so I think I will do my closing thoughts and wrap up.
This was a fun read and I cant wait to see what to see what you come up with next. Now Before we finish up I want to give a very belated welcome to Yws.
Keep writing and remember to drink water!
Hey there! I'm finally home from traveling, so I can finally get back into reviewing some fantastic poems! I saw your poem in the green room so I thought it was a perfect place to start. Let's jump right into the review:
You touch on a very relatable topic, it is something that every single person on the earth experience (well, unless you were born after 2020 I guess XD). The first thing that stood out to me, was your rhyme scheme. You keep it consistent throughout the entire thing, which was pretty cool. I liked your rhyme between the words mandatory and story. And also 2020 in plenty. Great work!
Reading this really brings me back to a time when life was so different. People really were wondering how to survive, the scariest part was that we didn't know how bad things were going to get, so there was no way to know how to act. I like how you mentioned some of these actions of people took, like stocking up on supplies, like toilet paper, then places getting shut down, even parks.
I like how you save this for the very end. You mention all the facts, and then you finally bring it back to the year, which is also the title. It's like a riddle most. I assume that people in the future will be able to read something like this, and might not even know which year were referencing, but all those who have experienced it, know it so dearly. I think you did a great job with this poem. Your statements are very factual and direct. You do a great job presenting the information. To improve, I would love to see some more metaphors, perhaps. Perhaps some things that represent how you felt personally, or other people. What can you compare this to? Overall though, I love this poem! Great job and keep on writing.
Your friend,
Ellie