Published November 30, 2005
Angels in the sky
Angels in heaven
Angels that fly
Angels lucky number seven
Angels right beside me
Angels right next to you
Angels hidden in a tree
Angels in the ocean oh so blue
Angels in your head
Angels in your mind
Angels heard everything you said
Angels aren’t hard to find
Angels here
Angels everywhere
Angels they take away all your fear
Angels they always play the game fair and square
Angels all around
Yet not all of them are found…..
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It was a simple poem. It was okay but maybe you could create some imagery.
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Have it be the main subject of the poem instead of just being tacked on at the end. It's just a suggestion...
thnx for your opinion but what exactly do you mean by putting more on to focus ??
This feels like a list... with an idea introduced at the end that is never really explored.
Honestly, it reads more like a brainstorm to get ideas than a finished poem. Maybe you could expand more on that last line and turn it into the focus?
Welcome, by the way.