Published February 17, 2008
[pre]You've given me your heart, but I don't know why.
You always seem to give me another try.
I've made my mistakes, that is true,
But the only one for me is you.
No matter the time, nor the place.
You will always be safe in my embrace.
I've pledged my heart to you, hold it well.
That we are meant for each other only time can tell.
Time will decide, but time is on our side.
I'll never leave you, though I say goodbye.
Nor will I betray you, you are safe with me.
Together we'll brave the future, whatever that may be.
Nothing can stop us, nothing at all.
If you need me, all you have to do is call.
I'll come running, wherever I am.
And no matter the peril, I'll take your hand.
Or you might take mine, for I am only a man.
I feel safe with you, as only you can.
And now dearheart, there is only one last thing to say.
I will always be yours, this Valentine's Day.[/pre]
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Awww...hate the day of love? How could anyone hate that day?
That is so sweet. many girls wish they had someone that could write a poem for them. Then again many girls wish the had a boyfriend that could actually write. That was awesome poem and I hate Valentine's Day.
This is adorable! I wish I got poems for Valentine's Day.
Even though I don't do the whole commercial part of Valentine's Day.
Your phrases flow from one to the next for the most part, I hope you have a nice tune to go with it, because played on the guitar this would knock them off their feet.
Thanks SP. It was actually something I made up on the spot, so I'm a little surprised it turned out so well. And yes, it is dedicated to someone.
It's rather funny, I have a really good story that I want to post, the problem is the story is on paper, and it's about 20-odd pages long, front and back of each page. It'll take forever to get it on here!
Altough there were some few minor puncuation errors in the beginning; the flowing was great, it was romantic and you could tell it was written on behalf of a person (if not i couldn't tell). But i loved this part
It was very catchy, your very talented.
Keep Writing:D
Awh! That is so sweet! XD I love it!
Keep writing.
Jamie