the gradual instant

by Cameron

  • Poetry
  • Dramatic

Published October 12, 2007

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EnchantressMuffin
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EnchantressMuffin wrote a review Review · Oct 13, 2007

*echoes Lindsay*

I really don't know what to say. This is really good, and really sweet, and really touching. I like this a lot... and there's nothing derogatory to say about this.

This is my favorite part:

the antiquity of your presence preserved
in dust streaks and the lingering perfume
you left on the door handles.

Strands of your hair still in the sink,
a forgotten crust on a breakfast plate;
barely enough (just enough)
to piece together a memory.


I love the imagery in the third stanza, and the last two lines. I actually was thinking about the funny little memories - the ones that get sprinkled all over your house, and your schools, and your neighborhood - just a couple of days ago. So I guess you could say that I got it right away.

Peace, love, chocolate,
Muffin

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Lindsaroo
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Lindsaroo commented Comment · Oct 13, 2007

I...have no idea what to say. But in a good way. This was really good. I'm going out and saying that I loved it. The imagery was excellent. And it was just put together really nice.

Great Job!

Lots O' Luv,
Lindsay



Obsessing over what you regret won't get you anywhere.
— Steggy