Young Writers Society

Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

Wow!! I watched the trailer, and I have to say, it's quite impressive! Even though this is a very informal script, having the actual product to see how the script translated to it helped a lot when reading. Your voiceover was really delightfully dramatic, especially with that reverb effect (have you ever considered a career in voice acting/acting in general? I think you'd kill it) and paired with the musical score behind it? It was so professional! Nice work!! (Also, slight disclaimer: I've never read/seen LotR before, but I do know some stuff about it from the internet/my friends, so if I say anything incorrect, forgive me!)

One thing I do have to say about the actual content of the script: as someone who really loves reading scripts, I was a little disappointed to see that this one wasn't a script in the traditional sense. Like I said before, having the final product really helped, but if I hadn't had the final product, I think it would have been a lot more confusing. This seemed to be a solitary project, but in the future, if you ever do write a script for something where you aren't doing everything, you would probably have to include what visuals the voice-over would correspond to. I've never actually written a script for something of this nature (I mainly do screen+stage, no trailers/music videos where action/visuals correspond to a voice-over) but I imagine it would look something like that, or at least something with visuals included.

I also thought it was a super cool choice to have the narrator be the villain. At the beginning, it seems more like an omniscient narrator, and someone who's not in the game, but then at the end, especially combined with that spooky effect, you start to see that it's really the villain. I thought that was an interesting touch and I really liked how you did that!

Overall: really nice work!! I think you did a great job on your script and the final product, and I hope to read/see more videos and scripts from you!! Until next time!!

Whoa... This would certainly convince me to buy the game. This brings back memories of watching the Lord of the Rings films with my family. I really liked how each sentence was split up. In game trailers, it's a stylistic choice to do this, as it allows for gameplay shots to be shown between each line. Your style here is very similar, and that's a really good thing.