Now and Forever

Wow this is beautiful! Your pOetry really spoke to me in a way i cant describe. Ive been through this too much and i know your emotions. Three things i liked most:

1. The lyricism was fine tuned, and of course the tempo is there.
2. Your word choice is amazing. Flat out amazing.
3. Your emotions are easy to find and the way you express them is so emphatic.

Now, a little constructive grammar help: try to create line breaks, since they have a better, and easier to see rythm. Well that is all I needed to say! Thanks again! Ember

Hi. I really liked this poem. It had a great sense of loss, of missing something or someone. When you wrote:

I'll look to the stars
And scream so loud.

I usually find that sort of thing to be rather hackneyed in poetry, but I think your use of it really underlined the feeling of loss and of suffering silently. I think, because everyone knows how it feels to lose someone or miss someone, it's a really great universal theme. Well done.

This is beautiful I can sense your true feelings poured out into this poem, so much that it almost made me cry.

"I'll look to the stars/ And scream so loud." - I like this line in particular, because of the intense emotions.

"We will still finad a way to reach you," - Typo: Find

"When I look to the skies,/ And search for you in distant stars above." - I didn't really understand this, because it is a fragmented sentence...

Overall, it was wonderful! I like the images of looking to the sky for your lost loved one

~Stay Awesome,
Socks