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Hi, Star!

I feel this has some good moments. It's certainly an understandable voice, so the reader can relate to it enough. The story is told through all the questions they ask. In fact, all the questions certainly relates to the title! lol, well done!

Unfortunately, I have to admit I zoned about as I read it. I lost interest, and I imagine it's because all the questions sounded the... same? It seemed repetitive to me. There wasn't much grabbing me. The questions were good to an extent, but there wasn't any meat to back it up or metaphors to help. Now, I liked the rain metaphor you had, but it seems like something you could use in other parts of the poem as well. It would tie it all together better.

Another thing was that the voice sounded incredibly doubtful, but I didn't feel any sympathy for the speaker. I didn't have any reason to really care for them? They sounded a bit whiny, which isn't what interests the reader very much. So I suppose I do wonder if the questions technique was wise, or if the wrong questions were used here.

But I did get the impression of a story, and it is a nice draft that could be improved upon. I think the trick here is to just make it more interesting to draw the reader in. Rather than have just a monologue with a story (which, if I may say again, was definitely present here!), you want the reader to be satisfied with having read it. Give it a reason to be read.

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!