I am here for the same purpose as my comrades before me. Checklist challenges. That aside, I'm Myth and I'll be reviewing this article/story. I hope you read this some day when you return, and if you do, please do tell me if it was useful...
I think your introduction was effective. Talking about your former opinions and also talking about how they changed after visiting this place, is a good way of engaging the reader. I do have a problem with your usage of "strengthened" here. It would seem like you're trying to say that your opinions changed, but when you say that they were "strengthened", it means that your opinions remained same but just grew and you were more convinced.
Coming to the grammar;
throughout, I noticed that you didn't put an apostrophe in your "don't"s and "didn't"s. There were also "I"s that weren't capitalized. In the last sentence, you're missing a comma before quoting the line. That's really all about the grammar. You could shorten your sentences a little.
The middle paragraph could be split into two. I get that it's a continuous narrative and that's where I think shortening your sentences will help you. If you don't get what I mean by "shortening sentences", do ask me and I'll give an example or two to show you.
You could've started your concluding paragraph a little better.
After this I dont remeber that much
This does serve the purpose of connecting the two paragraphs, but as a conclusive tool, it doesn't do well. Also, Si, Usted es un vaquero loco. That's all I've got to say. It was hilarious and scary that you were riding a saddle that you weren't used to. It reminds me of when I fell of a horse and injured myself pretty bad.
I enjoyed this. I hope you're still writing.
Yours sincerely,
Myth
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