It's just another night.
With a glimpse of all darkness.
The moon is set along with stars.
It's just the way it shines,
That makes fear trush turbines.
And just a sight taken too.
Am heading up.
Where the sky is staring at me.
Some say it's darken. Some say faded.
It's just another night.
With the same dreams falling.!
There's an hollowness beneath.!
Where souls meet heart fleets,
It's still dark in there,
That's what mind did say.
That's where the hatred lies,
That's where envy cries.
There isn't a shine,
Cause there won't be any other divine.
It was just a criteria,
Which soon began as raged dilemma!
That night had seen faces with watery eyes.
That night had gazed on souls with all her might.
That night had faced the death with her love besides.
That night had heard screams with all of inchantous.
That night had a lustrous moon, and infantry stars.
That night was all were it had began with.
This wasn't a battle, it was ragement,
It was the avengeful revenge!
That night was just another night.
There was darkness,
A dark heart indeed, a dark hope of faith! Lovers never chanted.
The wise had denied.
The old had got a look of emphasized.
The night wasn't dark,
The faces hidden were.!
Questions tagged!
Answers lacked.
The reason for this demise.?
The reason, were it all began?
This was fondle,
Of having shattered dreams,
Having shattered lives.!
Having shattered hopes.!
Having shattered peace.!
It wasn't a night,
It was just another dreadful delight,
It was just another night,
With reality turned up in everyone's sights!
. - damselin❤
. - Akshansh Pandey.
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Hey, Bunny234! Dracula is here to review on behalf of Team Monkey!
This poem is seems like lots of little poems jumbled together, and that's not a bad thing! I think it serves to show just how chaotic the world is, and how people need to work together, rather than going off in little groups and causing destruction. The repetition in this is great, not only of the fact that it's just another night, but the darkness too. It's still dark in there. Things do seem dark a lot of time nowadays, but in this metaphor, I think there's also a message of hope. Because even though night always returns, there's a moment of light before it.
That night had a lustrous moon, and infantry stars.
That night was all were it had began with.
This part is interesting, where the first words are constantly repeated. It adds a real emphasis on the phrases that come after, and your description of the night.
Thank you for sharing this, it's a very meaningful and well thought-out poem!
Hi, I'm Meerkat with a review.
some of your words choices might benefit from a revision. For example, saying "avengful revenge" is redundant. Finally, there were a couple typos (I'm not sure what you meant by "trush"), but those are nothing a run through spellcheck couldn't fix.
and thank you for writing!
Let's get the boring stuff out of the way first: grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc.
There were some small mistakes that were slightly distracting while reading. Firstly, you only need an exclamation mark or a question mark to end a sentence, not a period as well. Having things like ".!" and ".?" are unnecessary. Next, you don't always have to end a line with a period, or even any punctuation at all. Poetry is very fluid like that.
Now, regarding the poem itself, I loved the personification of the night as a watchful being. The message of the night as so ordinary yet so extraordinary at the same time was very explorative and creative; reinforcing that there is beauty and pain hidden in memory in the darkness of the sky. Some of the phrases you used were beautiful, especially where you used repetition to expand on an idea. All in all, a lovely poem.
Have a great night
This is absolutely amazing, you should keep up the great work. I love the meaning behind this poem also. Now I'm really excited to read your other published works. You're an amazing writer. I loved how it described the night and how dark it was and how it described the reality of night. I also like how people can relate to this because feel like night and that feel dark. It describes a lot of feelings. You should really keep up the great work.
Thanks a ton @airazhae18