On the outside I'm angry,
On the outside I'm mean,
On the outside I'm pretending you never meant a thing to me,
On the outside it's easy to put on a face,
But on the inside I know that you'll never be replaced,
I'm crying,
I'm dying without you,
I'm sobbing,
At the thought that we are through,
I'm sorry,
That I pushed you away,
I wish there was something I could do,
To make you stay,
It's hard to admit,
That I was wrong,
But I'll never tell how hard it is to get along,
I never wanted to break your heart,
But I'm so hurt cause I loved you from the start,
I'm crying,
I'm dying without you,
I'm sobbing,
At the thought that we are through,
I'm sorry,
That I pushed you away,
I wish there was something I could do,
To make you stay,
Honey I'd take it all back if I could,
And I wish that you understood,
But my stupid pride always gets int he way,
Honey I don't know what I'll do if you walk away,
I'm crying, (Oh, I'm crying)
I'm dying without you, (without you)
I'm sobbing, (oh woah oh)
At the thought that we are through,
I'm sorry,
That I pushed you away,
I wish there was something I could do,
To make you stay x2
Make you stay
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hello there!
I liked your lyrics because you showed your feelings and emotions to it. But one thing that distracted me while I was looking down at your lyrics is the word "dieing"... shouldn't it be "dying"?... well, that's all. oh,Hobbit stated it already... just noticed it now.
Keep writing.
Peace out!
Hey, so I have just a couple things for you.
Number one: dieing should be "dying"
Number two: the line "But I'll never tell how it's hard to get along" reads somewhat awkwardly to me. I would change it to "But I'll never tell how hard it is to get along."
Other than that I liked this song because I definitely feel as though someone could sing this. It would be great acoustic or maybe even a slow R&B song.
Hi!
My favorite part is the part I'm assuming is the chorus, since it's getting repeated.
I want to say that this is pretty good!
So... good work.