Published April 9, 2007
Broken shards of glass
Lay all around
The world is silent
Without a sound
Dreams, Hopes, Promises
Strewn all over the floor
There is nothing left
In one piece anymore
Lies, Deception, Hatred
Come down the wall
Peace cannot find refuge
There is no love at all
Clinging to false idols of the past
Room is spinning
Much too fast
No one is left inside this place
He is gone without a trace
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Well, this is the secnd piece I've read from you and I have to say...I love it! I believe you're very talented, so don't be afraid to continue writing. Once again, really like the way the poem flows, evenly and smoothly. Maybe put a little space in between some lines, just a suggestion. All in all, lovely. Good job!
Wow. I loved this!!!!
Great work,
Alainna
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