If crazy = genius.
Such a true song
I'm crazy
I run on
cussing and
writing and
loud deafening music
people tell me to stop
they say it hurts their hearts, their heads, their ears
I don't care
I'm crazy
And everyone knows it
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Hi! Murphy here.
I absolutely love love love this!!! I am also ridiculously crazy and proud of it! I cuss all the time and turn my music up loud as hell!!! haha Anyways, I like that this has a short and sweet feel to it but also the "I don't care what you think of me" kind of attitude.
A few things I wasn't a fan of was the "=" thing. It just didn't run smoothly and my eyes hated seeing it in a poem. The other thing I didn't like was that the majority of the poem is short and then you have that long line. I think it would flow better is it was cut in half like the rest of the poem.
That's all I got for ya. I loved it. I love crazy people. They are literally what makes up my entire friend circle. If you aren't at least a little bit weird, you will not survive haha. Stay crazy!
hello book princess, Adrian here for a review
first off welcome to YWS!
second OH MY GOD PANIC AT THE DISCO YES
okay that out of the way
TIME FOR THE REVIEW
is the lack of punctuation a style choice?
if so i don't think it really fits this poem.
its also really inconsistent if the no punctuation at all was your plan.
capitalization is also a problem in this poem.
overall i do like what this poem is about and i feel like you got your point across i just wish that you would elaborate on more that makes you so crazy. what makes it apparent to everyone that knows that you're crazy that you are just that?
other than that i dont have anything else to say
have a great day and happy holidays
happy writing
>Adrian
Hi BookPrincess313! Saru here for a hopefully helpful review! Oh, and by the way, welcome to the site!
I'm going to get constructive criticism out of the way first so we can get on with what was great about this.
The equals sign seemed kind of out of place here, maybe you'd consider replacing it with 'is'?
Additionally, through the rest of the poem, you never address the statement that 'crazy = genius' again, and I don't think it makes sense to say it's the same if you aren't going to address the 'genius' part again somewhere.
I don't quite see how this relates to the poem, it's kind of an out-of-place line that doesn't make much sense. Can you explain its meaning?
Firstly, this seemed repetitive (which is okay) but it also had a flow to it, which made it seem like a sentence or a phrase that should be kept altogether, and not separated. So when you spread this out over a few lines, it kind of interrupted that flow.
Secondly, 'cussing' and 'writing' are both verbs, but then you write 'loud deafening music' and that's not a verb, so it confuses the reader. Maybe 'playing loud deafening music'?
And... that's it for constructive criticism! This poem was a little confusing, but you can definitely get the overall theme and meaning of it. I didn't have any grammar to correct (which is super rare), so good job.
Keep writing!
~Saru
Okay, first of all *inhale* PANIC! AT THE DISCO FOR LIFE! Am I right?
Welcome to YWS!!!
(i'm a little crazy too)