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This is a really good poem. The imagery you used is wonderful, and I felt invested in the poem. My favorite line:
"They are as clear as the honest reflection in a mirror". I'm not sure why I liked this line, but it was good.
Hey,
Thanks Matt, for the advice! I agree that the colour was a bit distracting so as you can now see I have changed it. Also, my spelling errors have been corrected and I will definitely spend some time in the future editing my work. Thank you once again.
-Blossom xx
Hi! I quite like this poem, but there are a couple of things that distracted me from it. Firstly, the colour is kind of difficult to read. No biggy, it's just something to keep in mind for the future - the reader should be captivated by your words and not distracted by the colour of them. Secondly, there are a few typos or spelling mistakes in there, so make sure you use spell check.
Apart from that, I think it's good, particularly the first stanza. I like the idea that peace has a speed, and "Your mind unravels / like an acient scroll" is an interesting image, so good work. You just need to take more care when you're typing and check your work thoroughly.