Hi! Kazey here for a review!
I really love the imagery you've got going on here. It was vibrant in my mind and so very beautiful. I think you really succeeded in bringing out very raw emotion in this piece, so well done. It kind of took me back to the 1920s or a similar era, and made me think about the cause of this persons isolation. Perhaps the are shunned for a disability. A lifestyle choice. A mistake in the past. Whatever the reason, you kept it ambiguous so that the readers mind could wander.
I feel there are parts of the poem lacking punctuation, whereas other parts are full of it. I personally prefer poems to be consistent the way through, though that is perhaps just my stylistic preference. For instance, the ends of many stanzas contain no period, question mark, exclamation point etc. and for me that is a must.
Other than that I have nothing else to say about the poem. It was very articulate and beautiful, and I was honestly struggling for a criticism to give!
~Kazey
Points: 11
Reviews: 64
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