It's like...

by Blift

  • Poetry
  • Other

Published November 22, 2012

It's lile...

I'm here, you're there
This thing is in the middle.

It sticks out while I put on my headphones

And remains there like a ghost.
I've got this idea

Of a horse, and a man.

Meeting a woman in the middle of the night

and it reminds me of something that i read three years ago

of a time in a house
where stories where perused.

Just don't.

i've wasted enough time...it's break

but

I still have no clue

Of what to do next.

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writingmyheartout
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writingmyheartout wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2012

I liked it, strong emotion. I think it was supposed to be "like" not "lile" at the beginning. But that was the only mistake I found. I just reviewed "For You" also by you. YOu should be a rapper I think you'd be good at that.


Blift
Blift replied · Nov 25, 2012

ahahahahahahaha that made me laugh

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dewdrop
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dewdrop wrote a review Review · Nov 22, 2012

wow thats a really strong poem and a great read. i am not a poetry expert so correct me if what i say is wrong but is the structure not a little broken....maybe you could edit that a little. but overall its a really intriguing poem.



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