Hi there! Tee here for a review.
This was super interesting to read and analyze because I don't think I've ever seen a poem in which snow and frosty weather have been associated with the feeling of disgust! This is an interesting thing to write about that's probably accurate for a lot more people than I realize.
In terms of capitalization, I think you made the right decision in leaving everything lowercase. This almost makes the poem seem even more angry/disgusted in terms of tone; there's a sort of passive aggressiveness that accompanies the decision to avoid proper capitalization or other stylistic choices like this.
Your punctuation doesn't seem to contain any errors, so I won't touch on anything there. I will say that I'm glad you used periods to signify the end of each thought.
I like your use of imagery. I feel like, when it comes to weather and outdoorsy poems, the ability to convey images and depict certain pictures within the reader's mind is the most effective way of getting your message across, so kudos to you on this. I would have perhaps chosen another, more aggressive verb in the place of "splatters" -- maybe "plummets" or "plunges" -- just to really tie together the feeling of disgust and irritation.
Great poem!!
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