Zadni Kralj Hrvatske-Peter

The name pretty much sums it up. But then, I want peoples take on it. (Has anyone heard of the country mentioned, by-the-way? :roll: )

Peter Svacic
On Peter's Mount,
Svacic had passed:
Croatia's crowned,
And her valiant last.



(In Croatian; a little tid-bit, and appropriate, as it's patriotic)

Petar Svacic
Na Petrovu Goru,
Svacic je pao:
Kralj Hrvatske,
I njezin hrabar zadnji.


(note-the c's in Svacic are to be pronounced 'ch' as in 'church')

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Bjorn
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Hahaha! :lol:

It's inescapable! :D But thanks. I'm currently working on a longer poem though. (I have a long one, it's I think under this section, it's called Gandalf and the Balrog)

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Shine
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Shine wrote a review · Sat Feb 04, 2006 9:56 am

'Chottor modhe bhalo'(Umm.. Erethror,does that comment now sound different. :lol:.Just not to confuse you,I would better write the translation of what I wrote in my language,it means "SHORT AND SWEET") :)

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Bjorn
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Oh I know, but its just that I get the same comment all the time :o ...Oh I gues I can't complain can I? :roll:

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timjim77
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Poetry is a candle, and prose is a fire in the hearth. We do not need a candle to be bright if we have many. Short and sweet is good, if the poem is good. Leave it be. Don't force your work.

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Bjorn
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I am noticing a pattern here....it seems my poems have a tendency, and I quote, of being 'short and sweet'. There's nothing bad about that, just it seems to follow most of my poems...(should I write longer ones, thus making them 'long and sweet'?)

And yes, King Peter was a real person, and ruled a real country by the name of Croatia.

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Sohini
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Exotic poem. It’s short and sweet.

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Bjorn
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Made your day? :?

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deleted6
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Okay that poem in another langauge made my day.



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