I want to write something, perhaps… What? I don't know. But there is something that might bring me fame or ruin my reputation. What it is, I don't know.
I want to become something, but the path is difficult, or perhaps I am the one who is weak. I don't understand, or perhaps I simply don't want to understand.
My thoughts have started to feel a little strange. Am I strange, or perhaps I don't even know myself?
Perhaps I want to understand myself. If my life, or I myself, were a subject, it would probably be a very difficult one… or perhaps not.
Perhaps I am strange. I always feel like doing something different. Whether it is about studies or responsibilities, I just want to run away.
I want to create my own rules, rules different from those made by the universe.
What am I? Why am I? I don't know.
But I want to become something. That much is possible, perhaps.
My thoughts keep changing. My ideas about what I want to become keep changing, too. But one thing never changes: I want to make a name for myself and become a good human being.
But what happens to that name and that goodness if I stop being human in the process?
But that doesn't mean I should become a bad person, either.
Perhaps I am troubled by my own thoughts… or perhaps not.
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
I really love this work its so easy to read. I feel like am writing writer thoughts in their diary.The poem is about someone who is confused about themselves, their future, and who they want to become.
The writer wants to achieve something meaningful in life and become a good person, but they don't know exactly what they want or whether they're strong enough to achieve it.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
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Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
Damn!! I love the whole piece and the repetition " perhaps.. " god!! Its so good. And my favorite line is
I know how it feels dude!.
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall it has that good, questioning, confused vibe and easy to read and understand. Thank you for sharing dear. Keep writing!!! Yay~
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First off, If you have not watched 'the history of the entire world I guess' on YouTube you should, this poem reminds me of the beginning of it. Typically I am not the biggest fan of use of the same word often, but you do it very well with the word perhaps. This is a concept I understand and relate to quite well. Being a human is weird but also to acknowledge it is weird. I also am happy that this includes that being good is subjective, as it is. It can mean being good to others or it can mean being good to yourself. There is also some songs to recommend based on this poem alone, such as either 5 or 8 by Sleeping at Last.
This piece particularly is my favorite, not knowing and curiosity is an amazing thing, and I am glad to see it expressed through this poem.
Thanks for reviewing this This is my first time on any plateform regarding my writing
And genuinely I am happy when I was sieng this
Its so beautiful. Am reviewing this.
Perhaps you understood what I could not fully expressed