Published April 21, 2011
As I sit here at the desk, writing this confession, I realize that my mother was right all along. There is something wrong with me. I don’t really know for sure what’s wrong, though. I do know I have blood all over my clothes and my hands. And I know that those hand prints on that axe lying on the floor match my hands. Did I kill my wife? Did I kill Martha? Did I kill my dog when I was 10? I believe so. What about the creature. The creature is a reflection of the creature living inside of me. Have I been touched by the devil? I don’t know. One thing I do know is that I cannot live with myself consciously knowing what I have done to my wife and others. I hear the police sirens coming up to the house now. The things that I had gotten out of the tool shed are simply put. A clamp vice, which I have attached to this here very desk I am writing this confession on, some electrical tape, which I stated before, some fishing line off my dad’s old fishing pole, and a .38 caliber pistol, which was also something my dad left behind when he died. The plan is simple. I cannot bring myself to pull the trigger of a gun I am holding to my own temple. I have situated the stock of the gun into the vice that is clamped to this desk I’m sitting at. I have tied the fishing line from the inside door handle, over to the trigger of the gun. I will have my face fixated right in front of the barrel when the police open the bedroom door. The note that I put on the front door was written by me, simply put: My wife is dead. I could no longer stand to be here so I went for a walk. The crime occurred in the master bedroom, top of the stairs, to the left.
All that is left to do now is wait.
“Police Department! Anybody here? Our weapons are drawn!”
I can now hear them descending the stairs. This is it for me. Please know I did not do this self willingly. I loved her. God forgi________________
For Candace, My Love
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Hi! Teardrop here! First of all, I didn't think the oversized text was nessesary, but oh well.
Anyway, I think you could have added more detail, and more raw emotion in this. It was short, and using detail and emotion could also add length.
The word "preceded" is overused. Try using a lot of different words to keep the story interesting. All I can say, is add more emotion and make the reader feel as if they're actually there.
Overall, I thought it was good! Keep adding more emotion to this!
~Teardrop