Ah this brought a smile to my face, I also really adore my sister, so I found this poem easy to relate too, and seemed very heartfelt.
So I think you do an excellent job covering different aspects of why you're such a huge fan of your sister, and you don't just lay on the compliments, but you also acknowledge all aspects of her personality, like being a bit mischievous and valiant -- that's nice because it starts to make it even more specific.
I think the poem could benefit in two areas,
1) Word Choice could be elevated.
I noticed you tended to go for pretty simplistic language like "nice", "good", "fine" "like" all really generic descriptors, even your imagery was fairly generic/cookie-cutter "sky big and blue" "little adorable" - I think if you brought up the level of your word choice a bit and tried to search for some more specific and imagery heavy words it'd bring the poem to the next level. Even taking a moment to dig into some of those imagery pieces would make the poem really stand out more and make a more lasting impression.
2) Bring out even more Specificity in your descriptions
I find that in writing love/adoration poems, one of the best things you can do is to think about how to make it very specifically about the person you're writing about with concrete imagery or concrete memories - if you can describe a specific instance that you share that can make the poem really pop, by taking it from something that could be about anyone's sibling relationship, to a specific one grown from you own specific adoration, feelings, memories, and love.
For instance when I wanted to write a poem about how much I love my sister, I thought about all the qualities I liked about her, but then I thought about how I could work those into a concrete memory that we've shared together - I decided to write a poem about how we always used to pick mulberries in the summer - and then interlaced the specific reasons I liked her right into the content of the poem. Adding that concrete specific memory, really makes the poem seem more realistic and interesting rather than just a list of "good things" about a person. Here's an article I wrote Specificity in Poetry that shares some tips of how to add more specificity to your writing to really make it stand out and make an impression.
Hopefully those suggestions help your editing and future writing! And keep up that relationship with your sister, as my mother always says, "a sister is a forever friend".
- alliyah
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