As I sit by my lonesome
My mind wanders—
What if I was really by my lonesome?
With no living being in sight
With no obligations or chatter
With no worries about another
Without a way to communicate
Seems comfortable
I can walk in the empty eerie streets
With only my company
As silence fills the air
Do I need connection or am I all I need?
Wishful thinking it might be
But what a comfortable thought it would be.
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O sentimento de solidão necessária, é incrivelmente bem expresso! Não vou mentir que quando escrevo poemas mais sentimentais sempre escrevo sobre a necessidade de reflertirmos sobre nós mesmos. Para mim, o verso que mais me deixou emocionado foi: " Do I need connection or am I all I need? " Expressa exatamente aquela sensação de: Somos tudo que precismaos, ou necessitamos de algo mais? Por não sermos tudo que nós precisamos, nos tornamos incompletos? Gostei muitooo!
Thank you so much for your kind words, yes that line is my favorite in the poem too. I appreciate the read and review
ahh! fellow newcomer!! hello, and welcome to young writer's society, i hope you're having a good time =3
this was a great poem, let's dive in
𝕥𝕙𝕚𝕟𝕘𝕤 𝕚 𝕝𝕠𝕧𝕖𝕕:
okay i really enjoyed how you took a new perspective on the idea of "comfort"! when i opened this piece, i definitely wasn't expecting this kind of definition of it (in a good way ><)
ahh! i immediately smiled here! caught me by surprise.
this is also a very relatable work for me (introverts yayyy) and it was refreshing to see someone who knows this feeling.
there has never been a more impactful question, i fear. i ask myself this quite often ^^'
𝕝𝕚𝕟𝕖𝕤 𝕥𝕠 𝕣𝕖𝕞𝕖𝕞𝕓𝕖𝕣:
your opening lines:
gave quite the mysterious almost ominous vibe (which built up to the "seems comfortable" line beautifully xD)
i don't know why but this sounds so peaceful. you painted the meaning of "comfort" so well.
𝕡𝕝𝕒𝕔𝕖𝕤 𝕥𝕠 𝕘𝕣𝕠𝕨:
i don't have much feedback! just keep writing, and over time you're work is just going to evolve and become even more lovely. this was amazing for a first piece!
overall, i related to and just generally loved your poem!
keep it up! dont stop, my friend <3
tati~
Hey thank you so much for your kind words and warm welcome, its my first time posting any poems anywhere lol I'm glad it resonated with you
of course!! wow, youre a natural!!