The way you ran for it,
Like it would keep the blame away
You ran for it, I'm left to pay
All the late night talks,
Never one fight
Now when the sun goes down
We're yellin' till it rises
Did the moments ever matter?
Were you just playing some sick game?
Was I just another pawn?
Don't you know,
Know the hurt and shame you left?
I'll admit, at times..
I miss you like crazy,
But everyday you make me hate you more.
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Very Beautiful. Couldn't write better myself! Hope you keep writing poetry. Personally I really like your work. Your a great poet. Really I'm not the best poet. But you have a talent. I really know what you were trying to say in this piece. Your . . . Your . . . Well really I am so stunned by this that we will have to create a new word because I really cant find a word to say about this it's better that Awesome! Keep writing!
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Thanks love, it does mean a lot.
Hero here for a review,
I feel like I say this alot but you need imagery and description. Your poem seems life-less rant. Someone might confuse it with a paragraph that they sent to their ex.. what makes it different or unique? Where is the rhythm?
I'm sorry but this is not a poem to me, its just words with line breaks.. I think you need more and your not trying to get it.
Anyways sorry if I have offended you,
Hero
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Review time! I like your "I hate my ex" poem lol even though that's not what it is called. At first I thought you were going to rhyme.. but after "Like it would keep the blame away, you ran from it, I'm left to pay." it seems you didn't mean to rhyme, lol. I think it would have been awesome to see it like that though! (This Is not a negative review by the way, I just was thinking and thought the rhyme would be cool.) Well keep up the writing!
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hi im alilovessandy and i will give you a heads up now i may babble a bit because i really need points and as i am your forth reviewer i need to talk more.ok so here it goes.
this was amazing. i loved every single word of it. it sounds a lot like the stuff im writing at the moment. was it a breakup that inspiered it? or was it something else? or do you just read books or something that inspiers single amazing poems?
( just a few question marks there. would you believe me if i said it was dramtic effect?) so anyway i dont really know what else to say. this really is an amazing. you should enter it in a competition or try and get it published or something.
anyway in the interest of points. how are you? whats your name? how old are you? where are you from? are you a school studient or a full time writer? do you have a writing partner? i do. we are writing a book together. its gonna be terrifying. i understand if you dont want to answer these thing beacause as far as you know im some creepy middle aged pedo hiding in his basement eating chips. im not if it makes you feel anybetter. im a highschool student from australia. (is it strange that i just used that exsample in another review? wow i just realised how creepy i am) anyway to explain myself i am really good at babbling and as i am your first reviewer i am trying to make the most of the situation as i desperatly need points. anyway one more question. do you like tmi or tid? if you dont know what that is its the mortal instruments and the infernal devices by cassandra clare. im a huge fan and i want to find some more people who love her books as much as i do. if you havent read them you have to asap. they are amazing. and i swear im not just saying that to get you to read them i am actually saying that because they are amazing.
anyway i look forward to reading your stuff in the future. good luck in your writing indevors. and have a nice day
this review is from alilovessandy who apreciates the points you have given her.
(again sorry for the babbling and the spelling(i have dislexia aswell wich i cant spell( its a horrible irony)) and sadly yes i do talk this much in real life.
Hey there. Wow, i like the intensity of your poem. Good job!
Personally, I have had the same kind of experience and I can easily relate to the poem because of the same emotions I feel for someone. The broken promises, the curses, the fights, the blames, the mistakes...they have caused nothing but hatred.
I like your poem.
Thanks!
Wow! I don't usually go for poetry, but this was really nice. I would've like for it to be longer, but that's just my opinion. It feels pretty solid. I'm not a huge fan of poetry, but I really admire people who are able to pull it off. Great job at writing a great piece!
Aw! Thanks hun. Means a lot, It is one of my very first (Good one) I have wrote.
Omg I love this. It just reminded me of my ex and how we used to be all lovey-dovey and never fight. Wow.
Great poem.
~Keep making new ones