Young Writers Society

This is short and sweet which makes it the best thing to give to this friend (if she is hasn't moved yet😕).

This poem shows your friend that you are the truest friend material that ever stepped face on the planet earth.

You have a gift for poetry, it is clear to see in your writing.👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼 4.5 out of 5!!!

Girl (or guy) you can write like BOSS!!! You go!

Awww! This is super sweet! You should DEFINITELY give it to your friend!!! It will be something treasured between you forever.

That being said, this is a really precious piece. I like how it looks back and reflects on great times and wonderful memories. It really shows the awesomeness of friendship.

The are only a couple things I'd suggest fixing up. First of all, the "i" in the first line needs to be capitalized. Secondly, the very last line has no punctuation, so I'd advise adding a period there. Otherwise, it's really, really nice! Great job!

Oh. My. FLIPPING GOD.

I love this. I would definitely send this to your friend. Make sure you capitalize that "i" in the first line, though!

I also think that you could add a comma after "late night car rides" like this:

> Late night car rides,
> So hopeful.

With that being said, that line was a bit confusing to me when I read it. I see how late night car rides could be fun, joyful, peaceful, or anything else. But I feel that the adjective "hopeful" doesn't deliver simply because there's no context to what it is you'd be hoping for. If the poem was longer, perhaps it would be elaborated: Like, if you explained that you were hoping you'd be in each other's company forever.

But I really LIKE the poem being short like this, so I feel that changing the adjective might work better. Keep in mind that this is just my opinion, as I naturally felt some slight dissonance after reading that line, like my brain didn't totally register it.

That being said I honestly really love this poem.

I especially love how the length of the poem is short, but the time-frame is so long. Its bittersweet how it goes from you guys as kids to you both having kids of you own. Just freaking awesome all around. I love the concept.

And, I think your friend would LOVE this.

This is beautiful there's something powerful about how concise it is. I loved the notion you conveyed that even as life becomes difficult you'll still be friends.

I really like the poem. I've had a lot of really close friends and I can feel that in the poem. One thing I would say is it sounds like its written for like a best friend instead of just any friend. I realllllyy loved the part about life spreading us thin it was a powerful line. The last line and I'll still call you friend seems kind of bland I feel like it could mean more if other words were used to really show how much you cared for your friend. The poem right now is kind of short but in a way that play's with the overall feel of it. If you were to give it to your friend I would just try to make it more personal. I loved reading it and hope to read more from you.

I like it because it is short and it has a lot of beautiful things in there. If someone were to write that for me I would be eternally grateful.

I like it. It is short and sweet, yet you tell all you want to say. My favorite is the last line. "And I'll still call you friend". It shows that friendships can last a lifetime, which is great. My only problem is the middle lines. I did not understand how car rides could be so hopeful. There is probably a good meaning to them, but I did not understand. Otherwise, there is nothing I would change. Keep on writing and Merry (early) Christmas!