Hey there! Shey here for a review!
Firstly, welcome to the site! Hope you enjoy it here! Secondly, I really enjoyed this poem. It was an ejoyable read, so let's jump into this.
Overall, this was a wall constructed poem. What I thought was the most impressive part had to have been the rhyme scheme. Rhyming in poetry is not necessary, and so most poets don't do it. The reason is that it's difficult, with the payoff ticking you force a rhyme and the piece becomes weird or unnatural. However, in this specific piece of literature, the rhyming almost never felt forced or disrupted the rhythm. There were a few exceptions where the lines didn't rhyme perfectly, which definitely did seem weird reading through it, but for the most part, it was flawless. As I mentioned, that's a difficult thing to accomplish, so good job.
Maybe this was just me, but I had trouble finding the rhythm in this piece. I'm not saying the piece had no rhythm, because I'm sure you feel it when you read it, but I just couldn't get it. I'm not too sure how to fix that, but maybe just keep it in mind for future works.
Anyway, great job! Keep up the great work, and I look forward to seeing more from you!
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